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Deviousness `anmari has been spreading her infectious positivity throughout our community for over 6 years. Throughout this time Ana has been at the core of all things devious, passionately developing an eclectic gallery, helping organise devmeets, participating in chat events and also recently completed dedicating her time as a Community Volunteer. We are absolutely delighted to bestow the Deviousness Award for May 2013 to `anmari, congratulations! Read More
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As to your question whether it is a nice piece or a cheap rip off; I think it is a very nice and gutsy piece that ,as you already stated, can get better with some fine tuning.
I believe the reason for you not liking the composition that much is the perspective.
Are you going for curvilinear perspective, one-point perspective, two-point perspective or three-point perspective?
In my opinion a two-point perspective will suit this piece the best, because it has checkerboard floor tiling and as you stated; it is a very emotional scene.
If you would only be able to change one thing, I would choose the lines of the floor tiling, because as they are right now they make the floor seem to tilt downward as on a steep angle. This effect makes the character closest seem to slide off the tilted floor.
When you change the floor tile lines the characters become more grounded and stable, and thus more believable, adding to the overall impact of the piece.
Now for the last of my nittpicking; the character in the back is drawn in deeper perspective than the character in the front.
Now for the good news;
The choice of colours is fabulous, it matches bathrooms nationwide and paired with the light and shadows it really gives off a natural yet emotional feel.
One of those things I keep looking at in this piece is the background, the details on the sink and the shower/curtain. Not to mention the cute detailing on the ceiling.
These elements seem to shine the brightest in this piece and appear to be your forte.
You are making great progress, looking at your past works. "Female nude 1" is my favourite piece in your gallery.
I really like/love that you've given me sutch a detailed comment and advise.
But I find it hard to reply.. Thinking what can I say that would be a good thing to say..
And I really was speachless for a while.
I'm going to alter this piece. but i dont like editing my pictures that mutch.. when I post something it's kind of done, and i dont touch it again. but I can make a new one.
Start al over from the sketch and then make some changes.. so it would be a differt piece..
UI prefer to do that because then you learn more I think.. Dont know why I do that..
Perspection whise I have nop iedea with one I was going for..
I think I'm going top sketch some differnt iedea's for this scene. How I could get the feelings better acrous.. Mayby not show the whole naked figure.. Or show his face and make him showing his back to the other person.
I think I wil rework this piece.. but not redifine it.. but thats what I think.. not sure what I wil do
The way you approach reworking a certain art piece is the same way I do it.
I archive most of my studies under date and subject, even if the pieces are bad.
I leave a small note attached to the bad pieces on which I write what I don't like about the piece.
When I have gathered enough guts to rework a piece I use the first piece for reference only.
Only using the parts that I did like I build a new sketch in thumbnail size (just like a storyboard square) only drawing where the horizon is and where and how big my figures are.
Starting with these fundamentals almost nothing can go wrong, and when it does I haven't wasted a lot of time on details.
Looking at your gallery I think you do this the same way as I do.
Only difference is that I don't make or publish complete pieces, the only things I do (and I am currently neck deep in them) are studies.